I am a student at in Uru Mānuka. In 2020 I was a year 7 and in 2021 I will be a year 8. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Great effort making your 1 minute movie trailer. I like how you tried a new DLO tool. I would like to see some more writing in your introduction explaining th task. I knew what you meant by "movie thing" but most of your readers will not know what that means.
How else could you add some detail to explain this work better? - Miss Birtch
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Kia ora Tane
ReplyDeleteGreat effort making your 1 minute movie trailer. I like how you tried a new DLO tool. I would like to see some more writing in your introduction explaining th task. I knew what you meant by "movie thing" but most of your readers will not know what that means.
How else could you add some detail to explain this work better?
- Miss Birtch